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7/7 AP World History DBQ Essay Example #6

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The Prompt

Develop an argument that evaluates the extent to which the Cold War impacted decolonization after 1945 CE

The Essay

Between the period of 1945 to 1991, most large empires were focused on large-scale decolonization. This in part resulted from the ending of WWII, with several nations promising freedom for sending soldiers. This also took part because of the spread of enlightenment and democratic ideals to constituent nations. However, the ending of WWII and spread of nationalism were not the only cause of decolonization. The Cold war also played a major role in starting much of the armed decolonization that occurred. Overall, the Cold War had great effects on starting the process of decolonization, as best seen through ideological differences, international pressure, and proxy wars. Firstly, the Cold War facilitated decolonization through ideological differences. The main difference that promoted decolonization was the belief in democratic principles, however many eastern nations promoted communist ideals. This fundamental difference had a chokehold on the decolonization process. Alternatively, in places like India there were religious differences that prompted decolonization, namely the Hindu/Muslim differences (Doc 3). This resulted in the creation of the Pakistani state, quelling many ongoing conflicts. Alternatively, there had been arguments for unity since the early 20th century, with prominent Indian politicians claiming that the shared Indian culture and nationalism would promote the creation of a free and powerful single-state (Doc 6). However, the Indian author’s position in the congress likely biased this source towards unity, as being nearly half a century before the partition, led to belief in the power of unity. Overall, Indian decolonization is a prime example of both religious and political differences in ideology. Secondly, international pressures throughout the cold war led to many empires decolonizing. The most prominent of these pressures was the UN, creating ubiquitous articles and statements arguing for the freedom and sovereignty of their nations (Doc 1). This pressure led to many nations accelerating their decolonization process, as the UN was a powerful ally in the period. Furthering this, the war in French Indochina led to nations like Singapore releasing international statements explaining the pressures from communism and the need for free and democratic policy (Doc 5). Statements such as these led to foreign intervention, with the East largely allying to support communist backed regimes, whilst the US and France were generally fighting to preserve free ideals. Conversely, international pressures to decolonize led to resistance from some empires reliant on their imperial holdings (Doc 2). This was best seen in Britain, with ministers and politicians fighting to keep their colonial holdings, making promises to control them democratically, and furthering their ‘proxy state’ status. This statement from a British minister greatly highlights how the British political system was focused in the period- showing the reliance on proxy states to maintain their imperial strength. Furthermore, the worries that decolonization would weaken empires were at the forefront of numerous nation’s decolonization -or resistance- plans. Overall, international pressure had a great effect on decolonization efforts across the globe. Lastly, proxy wars were at the center of armed decolonization across the globe, highlighting the impact of the Cold War. This was best seen in the Second Indochina (Vietnam) war, highlighting the struggle between communist supported regimes and democratic supported regimes. This resulted in an armed conflict in which the communist backed Viet Cong eventually won out through their usage of guerilla warfare. Furthermore, conflicts in Algeria led to French diplomats realizing the lack of relations with their imperial holdings created the downfall of their empire (Doc 4). This French downfall was a direct result of proxy wars, as the French generally supported democratic ideals, and got involved to protect them for their constituent states. However, the journalist’s point of view likely skews this belief toward popular opinion in urban France of the period. This furthers the nationalist beliefs in France, explaining how to rebuild their great imperial empire after decolonization. However, southeast Asia was not the only place proxy wars took place, with communist propaganda being used to showcase the power that India, China, and African states had over western powers (Doc 7). These proxy wars were generally more ideological however, with states like India fighting for their own democratic government with religious freedom. Conversely, China was trying to push out western powers to reclaim their lost sovereignty at their entry-points lost to unfair treaties. However, China ultimately fell to communism due to the close proximity of the USSR, and desire to end their century of humiliation. Overall, proxy wars played a huge role in decolonizing during the cold war. In conclusion, much of decolonization was caused by cold war beliefs- largely through ideological struggles, international pressures, and proxy wars. This was seen best through religious debates resulting in the partition of India, which largely attempted to quell the potential for religious genocides. Another good example is the two wars in French Indochina, with the first being claimed as a mission to preserve democracy, and the second being a direct proxy was between the US and USSR. Overall, the cold war was one of the biggest players in decolonizing imperial holdings, thus ending the era of empires.

Score Breakdown

Thesis (1/1)

Contextualization (1/1)

Evidence from Documents (2/2)

Evidence Beyond Documents (1/1)

Sourcing (1/1)

Complexity (1/1)

Why This Essay Scored Well

The introduction sets up the argument before the thesis arrives. It names the end of World War II and the spread of democratic ideals as causes, then says they "were not the only cause" and turns to the Cold War. The thesis gives three ways the Cold War mattered, "ideological differences, international pressure, and proxy wars," and the body paragraphs follow that order.

The sourcing is specific. In the first body paragraph, the writer reads Doc 6's case for a united India in light of the author's place in the Congress party and notes it was written "nearly half a century before the partition," so its hope for unity came before the split. In the third body paragraph, the writer suggests the French journalist in Doc 4 leans "toward popular opinion in urban France." Both sentences explain how a source's position shapes what it says, which earns the sourcing point.

The outside evidence goes beyond naming events. The Vietnam example describes a war between communist-backed and democratic-backed sides that was won "through their usage of guerilla warfare," and the closing example ties China's turn to communism to Soviet influence and the push to end its century of humiliation. Using all seven documents in support of the three claims secures both document points.

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What Could Be Improved

Several historical claims are wrong. The essay says partition created Pakistan while "quelling many ongoing conflicts," but the 1947 partition set off mass violence that killed hundreds of thousands of people and displaced about 15 million. The conclusion says the first Indochina war was fought as "a mission to preserve democracy," though France fought it to restore its colonial rule. The Algerian War was a fight for independence from France and not a Cold War proxy war, and Saigon fell in 1975 to the North Vietnamese army, with the Viet Cong fighting alongside it.

The essay's link to the Cold War is weakest in the India material. Religious division and Congress nationalism drove partition, and the paragraph never connects either one to the superpower rivalry it is supposed to prove. The opening claim that the democratic and communist split "had a chokehold on the decolonization process" gets no example.

Some documents are named more than explained. Doc 5 is summed up as statements about "pressures from communism," with no detail on what the source says. Doc 2 identifies a British minister but never says who he was addressing or why that matters. The complexity point rests mostly on the three-part structure, and the China comparison at the end of the proxy war paragraph needed more development to carry it.

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